not that good actually. the structure might work so far, but the sounds and build-up automations don't really kick in. the kickdrum is too soft, the bassline needs more bite, same for most of the other sounds. try not to rework it over and over again, try something different (even if it's ripped off another song,doesn't matter). bring some dynamics with recording automations to patterns, which is a nice tool, I just found out

do some tutorials for compression, EQing, filtering and so on. you'll be surprised, how big the differences can be. listen to your momentary favourites and try to reproduce them 1 by 1, if you are to lazy to find out the chords (as I am for example), search a midi file. create a ghost kickdrum with several peak contollers for pad volume, bass volume, delays, reverbs and so on. be aware of the little mute button of the FPC!
just don't stop learning and screwing around with FL9, I learned most of the features by accident actually.
Groetjes,
Ramland